SmacSBUB
SmacSBU@alien.top
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Disagree. The multi-syllable first word in the third line leading to Ndamukong on the fourth turns the piece into two non-rhyming couplets by establishing two different meters. If you use “Personal Foul” the fourth line betrays the rhythm and it sounds like you fucked up the ending.